Let's analyse the above essay.
This one is written in a super-simple way. I've basically written it primarily as a model of how to get an 8.
Everything about this one is minimalistic, simple and efficient. The introduction here is the most efficient version possible for this kind of essay. I've simply paraphrased both sides of the argument framing one of them as my own. Having a longer introduction style is fine, but this is a good one for test conditions where you don't want to waste time and keep things simple.
You'll find my body 1 is pretty formulaic. I'm using a 'there are a number of' topic sentence followed by a 'Firstly/Secondly' with supporting sentences structure.
On this point, I noticed someone asking in the chat regarding the use of 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' and that I had apparently said that you shouldn't do this. Let me clarify. I don't like a Firstly / Secondly / Lastly structure. This is because you are forcing yourself to use 3 points. When you have a point, it's necessary to provide supporting evidence for any claims you make. In other words, you need to write two sentences per point at a minimum to be safe from CC and TR punishments. Having 3 points in your paragraph means that you need 7 sentences (remember the topic sentence) to write a paragraph that follows the criteria. Writing paragraphs of 7 sentences is too big and wastes time without contributing meaningfully to your TR score.
The other point is that you shouldn't be using 'Firstly / Secondly' in both paragraphs. It makes your whole essay extremely formulaic. You'll notice that my second body paragraph doesn't use any of the sentence openers that my first one does. All that being said, this essay is slightly more formulaic than I'd normally write, but writing in this way does help to keep writing any essay really easy.
One last thing I want to mention. Notice how clear my position is throughout this essay. My position appears in the introduction, the body 2 topic sentence and twice in the conclusion (the last sentence isn't entirely necessary, but it's good to make super-sure that your examiner knows you gave your position). I read too many essays where I get to the conclusion and I still have no idea what the writer's position is going to be. For this reason, you might find the structure I've used here a useful one.
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This one is written in a super-simple way. I've basically written it primarily as a model of how to get an 8.
Everything about this one is minimalistic, simple and efficient. The introduction here is the most efficient version possible for this kind of essay. I've simply paraphrased both sides of the argument framing one of them as my own. Having a longer introduction style is fine, but this is a good one for test conditions where you don't want to waste time and keep things simple.
You'll find my body 1 is pretty formulaic. I'm using a 'there are a number of' topic sentence followed by a 'Firstly/Secondly' with supporting sentences structure.
On this point, I noticed someone asking in the chat regarding the use of 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' and that I had apparently said that you shouldn't do this. Let me clarify. I don't like a Firstly / Secondly / Lastly structure. This is because you are forcing yourself to use 3 points. When you have a point, it's necessary to provide supporting evidence for any claims you make. In other words, you need to write two sentences per point at a minimum to be safe from CC and TR punishments. Having 3 points in your paragraph means that you need 7 sentences (remember the topic sentence) to write a paragraph that follows the criteria. Writing paragraphs of 7 sentences is too big and wastes time without contributing meaningfully to your TR score.
The other point is that you shouldn't be using 'Firstly / Secondly' in both paragraphs. It makes your whole essay extremely formulaic. You'll notice that my second body paragraph doesn't use any of the sentence openers that my first one does. All that being said, this essay is slightly more formulaic than I'd normally write, but writing in this way does help to keep writing any essay really easy.
One last thing I want to mention. Notice how clear my position is throughout this essay. My position appears in the introduction, the body 2 topic sentence and twice in the conclusion (the last sentence isn't entirely necessary, but it's good to make super-sure that your examiner knows you gave your position). I read too many essays where I get to the conclusion and I still have no idea what the writer's position is going to be. For this reason, you might find the structure I've used here a useful one.
Feel free to discuss this one in the chat. I'm sure some of the experts on this channel will be happy to join in and give advice.
For more, join us via
@doniyors_official_channel1
@doniyors_speaking_club.